Script Update Fifth Draft

I'm toying with the idea of adding a page to the comic at the end. It'll totally change the tone of the story and potentially destroys the character arc but it feels better to me. I'll need to get some feedback.

Here it is :

PAGE 1 (5 panels)

PANEL 1

Long wide panel, close up of sandaled feet running on the ground.

CAPTION

I never thought I would live through my first battle let alone experience and live through such things as I have in the last 5 days.

CENTURION

Keep going! They’re right behind us!

PANEL 2

We focus on a small group of the romans breaking off from the main force. The are heading towards a forest.

CAPTION

Our forces were unable to break the Cimbrian defense and we fled...

FLAVIUS

This way! We’ll lose them in the woods!